User blog comment:Grimmival/Vampire/@comment-1966944-20120511071618/@comment-4672536-20120511235848

This is the finisjed story. I just started this, and your advice is very helpful. I'm all about action and violence, sometimes getting lost in the story. I am also a fast typer and sometimes I don't realize the mistakes when I type, but when reviewing I found them. I should type slower, and describe emotions. And thanks for the feedback!