Thread:Bloke Down Under/@comment-24604127-20140319085713

can the synopsis  get strongly edited? Some of them seem to be just a bad case of stop/start script writing. Say like a synopsis for the "Three Bad Wolves"     -  (bit long but what do you think)

A hulking figure in a singlet that has seen better days stands in his upstairs bedroom, a messy dump clearly belonging to a chronic bachelor. The man, Hap Lasser, is watching an exercise video on TV, lifts a dumb bell, shaking it in spastic bursts then losing his grip sends it flying through the closed window, “bummer”, with a shrug heads for the door. Just as he reaches down to the dumb bell, his home explodes in a fireball behind him. Slowly turns and stares back at his burning home, “wow”. Dawn breaks on the crime scene and as the Bomb Squad and Fire & Rescue root through the smouldering wreckage, Nick and Hank try to prise a statement from Hap, who's more concerned at picking up pieces of his shattered Iron Buster LP and classic Warrior Princess comic than what's left of his home. Hap makes it clear that he's not involved in any shady activities that would result in his home exploding and as he gets emotional, Nick sees Hap morph to reveal himself as a Blutbad, though unusually he doesn't realize there’s a Grimm standing beside him. It turns out his brother won’t miss his baseball card collection as he died in a similar house fire last month, but both detectives feel this is too strange to be a coincidence. As Hank and Nick question Hap in an attempt to make a connection between the two fires and work their way through a list of all the failed venture monies Hap owes, Monroe pays a surprise visit to the precinct. Apparently, he's Hap's emergency contact and he has begrudgingly agreed to take in Hap during his time of need. Hap excitedly hugs his man Monroe who is uncomfortably trying to resist when Nick asks Monroe to keep an eye on him for a couple days to make sure he stays out of trouble. A motorcycle pulls up to the remnants of Hap’s house and a female helmeted rider approaches the wreckage, sniffing until she picks up a scent and hones in on a plume of vapour around a burst and twisted propane line. The frustrated rider gives a creature-like growl and tears off on her motorcycle. Nick and Hank go over the Lasser case files with the arson investigator, Lt. Orson. The lieutenant explains that despite the fact that these "accidents" look like foul play, it seems to be a true coincidence; both fires can be linked to electrical/gas failures however Nick still refuses to believe that this was by chance and considers the beneficiaries were involved. Monroe’s house guest is putting a damper on his very organized way of life when they hear a commotion outside. There is a shattering of glass and Nick who had just parked out front is pulled through the driver’s window by a ferocious female Blutbad. On realizing he’s a Grimm she suddenly jumps back giving Nick a chance to face the assailant. Monroe and Hap rush out screaming for the fighting to stop; the Blutbad is Hap's sister and Monroe's ex-girlfriend, Angelina Lasser.

Now inside Monroe explains the situation to a furious Angelina. Yes he is friends with a Grimm even after what his family has done to their ancestors, but he is also a cop. After some more placating which required Hap and Monroe standing between them, Angelina defends her behaviour, she was protecting her brother and Monroe. When Nick discovers that Hap was the beneficiary of the first brother’s estate and Angelina was the beneficiary in the event that Hap dies, he grows suspicious of her involvement in the fire, but Monroe pleads that despite her hot-headed nature, he knows Angelina and she would never do anything to harm either brother.

Nick returns to the precinct leaving the three alone for the night but as they bring back memories of the good old days Angelina’s lively spirit starts arousing long dormant feelings in Monroe. She challenges him to take to the forests once more and without a reply she tears through the wood, running wild and free. At first hesitant but with Hap sleeping on the couch from peppermint schnappes, Monroe takes after her with pure glee across his face. As dawn breaks Monroe awakes in the forest, Angelina by his side, then is alarmed to find bloodstains on his hand and mouth.

Hap is also woken by a knock the door and on opening is met by four bullets.

When Angelina and Monroe return, the police have already arrived and confronted by Nick, Monroe is left speechless. Back at the station as Hank interrogates Angelina, he comments about a stain on her shirt. Ripping it off she aggressively throws it at him since it is blood, he better test it. Analysis proves it to be rabbit blood so Monroe and Angelina are released. On release, as analysis proves it to be rabbit blood, Angelina voices her frustration with Monroe for being friends with cops, who are trying to pin Hap's murder on her and storms off, leaving a dejected Monroe behind. On investigating Nick and Hank find that the arson investigator dealing with this case happened to share the surname of two brothers murdered two years ago, a case where it was believed Angelina may have been responsible. In their theory, Lieutenant Orson, who knows better than anyone how to make an explosion look like an accident, killed hers for payback. Nick and Hank conclude family feud. To test this Nick meets up with the lieutenant and when telling him they're getting a second opinion on the files it is a Bauerschwein (BOW-ur-shvine; Germ. Bauer "farmer"** + Schwein "pig") pig-like) who answers, specifying his family never had any problems with Grimms, don’t stir up trouble now. Nick goes searching for Angelina at Monroe’s, but just like he told Angelina and the police Bauerschwein who had made a threatening visit earlier, he is going to stay there with a glass of wine and not having anything to do with this Blutbad-Bauerschwein Feud that’s been going on for centuries. Just mentioning it and now his friend Hap is dead. Back to the precinct to try find Angelina, Nick and Hank weren’t aware Angelina was currently upstairs tracking down Lt. Orson's office, but her search of his desk is interrupted by an officer who is no match for her Blutbad strength and she escapes easily. On hearing of the surprise attack upstairs the two knew otherwise and Nick takes on Lt. Orson's home, worried that Angelina may beat him there but finds him relaxing in a mud bath, a comforting activity for Bauerschwein. Orson tries to reason with Nick, making the argument that they're actually on the same side and it’s Angelina who is the monster they should be after. Nick’s response, what Angelina did is another issue -he killed two people and is under arrest. But before Nick gets a chance to take action, Angelina arrives on the scene and a viscious Blutbad –v- Bauerschwein fight ensues with Nick finding himself in quite the predicament, whom to shoot. When presented with an opportunity to hit Angelina's lower back, he takes it, remembering reading about Blutbaden's crippling sensitivity on the spine in the Grimm Diaries. When Angelina recovers and turns on Nick, Orson picks up his gun and shoots her Nick then kicks the gun out of his hand to stop a further shot. He then turns back to Angelina, but the door is open and there are blood drops on the path leading to the woods. 